One Down, Four To Go

My first essay is posted, at last! I personally feel like it's just awful, but I had two English-minded friends of mine proofread it. Nicole, who is my age, corrected quite a few things, mostly sentence awkwardness that comes from not writing for a while, but said it was good overall. Her mother, Natalie, told me it was great as is and that if I had messed with it any more, I could have ruined it. Her husband Nathan also read it, and while he's more of the read-instruction-manuals type of guy, he commented that once I get a good grade on it that I should sell it to someone. I took all three as compliments, but of course a writer is their own biggest critic. I'm anxious to see how my score turns out.